CorrosiveEye's audio Reviews on Newgrounds

[Sun Kingdom]

Nice fun song. Appropriate title :)

-Critiques-

Drums were repetitive. I assume you were experimenting but I think you should polish your songs before uploading to NG. So add more variety to the drum riffs (breakdowns, variations to drum riffs)

I see you many several melodies in this song. All you really need to do is take one melody and make variations of it and play them at different parts of the song. You can add a second melody but that's pretty much all you really need.

-Good Stuff-

This song just sounds nice.

The drums WERE plain but you CAN use those to make awesome drum riffs. Good selection tbh, it has a lot of potential. I think you should reuse them in another song using my critiques above.

3.5/5

Keep working hard :) and to answer your question, yes a G major scale with the root D is D mixolydian. From D to C in the key of Gmajor, going up, is whole-whole-half-whole-whole-half.

If you have any questions you can PM me.

Merpy responds:

thanks dude

[Ditchy - Exhale]

Great song, pleasure to listen to.

-Critiques-

The "ahhhhhh" vocals' reverb could have some stereo effects to it so that it dissappears into the rest of the song more seamlessly.

The crash's high frequencies seem a bit too high. When it's played with other instruments, it seems to clash. I'd even say it's a bit overpowering. It SHOULD stand out but it needs blend in a bit more so I suggest turning down some of the higher frequencies on it.

The high hats sound a bit low in quality, as if they've been processed at a really low bit rate. Maybe you should use some different ones or synthesize your own.

There really isn't anything special about this song. It's all very generic sounding and plain. It needs a special spark that sets it apart from the rest. A reason to exist. What other aspects of exhaling can you incorporate into this song to make it more special? Maybe something about inhaling. Maybe record someone inhaling and use it before you start the song. You could even incorporate some lyrics.

Your song lacks sub bass. Your kick is punchy but, there's nothing else in the low end that complements it. It kinda makes this song feel empty. In contrast, there are a ton of thing in the high frequency spectrum of the song which makes the song unbalanced.

Also because your song is about exhaling, it needs more build ups and drops. Automate the volume of your instruments and add some more instruments at ONLY the buildups and make them epic.

Actually I feel like you should learn more about reverberation and how you can incorporate it into your songs to full effects.

Make sure you don't have frequencies clashing with eachother. Try to EQ when necessary.

You claps and reverse claps lack reverb. You could use a reverb with a really short gate on it to add presence.

-Good Stuff-

Concept of the song (exhaling - releasing)

Instrumentation was nice. You had a wide variety of instruments in this song.

4/5

Good effort and good luck in the future! :)

[Video Game Quickie: SSBB]

Wonderful song Herdunculus.

-Critiques-

I think you should use some stereo imaging on some instruments. Pan things here and there. All the instruments seem to be coming from the center.

Maybe add some delay on link's voice?

Kicks don't seem to have any punch. Maybe some compression and EQ would help out.

Your snare could use some more "body" frequencies.

I would personally raise some of the higher frequencies on the lead synth in the beginning.

The build up around link's voice could use more build up elements so that it feels MORE built up. When the song drops after link's voice it would feel more satisfying(?)

-Good Stuff-

I like the distorted wobble synth

Song had me rocking my head the whole time.

I like the bass and all the reverb on it :)

I REALLY like the little synth with all that reverb on it playing in the backround that started around the 0:40. I don't know if it's a piano or not I can't really put my finger on it. Anyway, good choice.

Great song 5/5

Herdunculus responds:

Duuude thanks for such a helpful review! I probably won't go back and change the song, since it was meant to be something done a little quickly. BUT this is extraordinary information for any future tracks I will make. Thanks a lot man :D

[Delusional]

1:05, 1:15 Bass clipped on the right side.

I'm not really feeling the piano though. Maybe you could make some changes so that the keys are pressed a bit softer?

I feel like some of the instruments are much louder than they need to be (flute, piano).

No real climax.

I'm not too sure if this would be a good opener to your first album though.

-Now for the good stuff-

Although, it is pretty loud at parts I'm really digging the flute though. It's feels a bit "loungy."

I like how you changed the saw too a E-guitar(?) around 1:43 for a teeny bit. I think you do that with the flute too around the one minute mark. I'll have to incorporate that into my own songs :)

lol this song portrays a delusional person very well. As if he/she's strolling through a park thinking he/she's awesome.

All in all, good song. Fun song. Deserves a good rating.

[City-Nations (Redux)]

Contrasting from your old pieces, this song is a big improvement. Although the instruments are still overpowering your voice. I still think you could put some effects on your voice.

I can't say much about lyrics lol I usually listen to how it sounds rather than what is written (not on purpose of course). some effects would be nice on them.

Compression and EQ are your friends :)

[Jack and Pill]

I can hear your room in the vocals. You could put your mic in a box and set it up upright so that the open side faces you and make sure you pad the box with plenty of soft stuff (I used T-shirts lol. I don't really use my mic too much though.

Use some effects like reverb and a little bit of chorus and see what happens :)

If you haven't seen this, you should: /portal/view/590285

[Boxcar]

I think your voice should be louder and should have some effects on it :)

The harmonica is like a cry from days gone by. This song is great. The guitar sounds good and the harmonica as well. Some effects would make it shine though.

[Brian Post '12 Demo Reel]

Actually, I thought this was pretty good. Your voices actually sounded like different people.

I noticed that your words and sentences have a constant rhythm to them (I don't know what it's called). You could make it more varied. Holding out consonants, vowels and things of that nature. "Well Aallright then."

Personally, following this advice would make it better for me. I'm no voice actor, but I hope I helped.

DietingNinja responds:

Thank you for the feedback, CorrosiveEyes; your advice is most certainly helpful!

I think the reason why I think everything seems to be done so quickly is because in order to make an effective demo reel you have to be able to fit in as many different voices as you possibly can, but my approach here is kind of dialogue heavy (with the same voices having more lines than usual) so the opportunity to switch it up wasn't really available to me without bogging down the overall pace of it.

However, I can most certainly see where you're coming from and I'll definitely keep that in mind when I start working on my demo for 2013!